Haiku Contest.

[Bayushi Hiromitsu]

-Ok, the first competition of the day, HAIKU CONTESTUUuuuUUu!

-Seat tigh and grab your teriaki. We had like, a million subscriptions, but only a few send the Haiku intact in the propper time.

-You can vote, and you can cheer. I have Doji Kakashi-san and Shosuro Tomoyo-san to express the feelings about the Haiku, to help to really understand this nice piece of art.

The music was soft, shakuhachi sounds filling the air as every haiku was appreciated

1- (no tittle)

This is my haiku
Please vote for my sweet poem
Something about nature

Doji Kakashi: -This Haiku shows a deep sincerity and softness and kindness.
Shosuro Tomoyo: -the indefinably about nature was so precise.
Bayushi Hiromitsu: -I did not understand, but it was deep... right?

2- Favors I do not need

The Rumors of yours
This summer I won't pay;
Silence is better.

Doji Kakashi: -We call can learn from this piece of wisdom.
Shosuro Tomoyo: -Silence is allways better.
Bayushi Hiromitsu: -It was deep about something... right?

3- Seppuku haiku:

You were not success-
ful. Your chance of success was
ninety-nine percent.

Doji Kakashi: -Oh, I know that feeling.
Shosuro Tomoyo: -Me too.
Bayushi Hiromitsu: -feeling? what feeling??

4- secret beauty:

I love and in my eyes
her true beauty really shines
but I'm scared to say so

Doji Kakashi: -lies in the eye of the beholder
Shosuro Tomoyo: -or in the curves of her body
Bayushi Hiromitsu: -why he is scared?

5-Art of Lucky

Chords and rhymes
Matters not, once I realise
Roll the dice

Doji Kakashi: -Bold as allways, to deal with chance.
Shosuro Tomoyo: -to deal with the unfolds of fate lies true understanding.
Bayushi Hiromitsu: -I like games...


The heimin passed collecting the votes in folded rice paper.

[Bayushi Hiromitsu]

-And we have a last one!! Enjoy!

6- "Diplomacy is Tough for a Spider"

I bring only words,
Not surprise in cavities.
Please stop checking them.

Doji Kakashi: -What? Could that mean... oh...
Shosuro Tomoyo: -Gross
Bayushi Hiromitsu: -AHAHAHAHAHA... GOOD ONE! I liked this one, make this one wins!

[Bayushi Senshi]

I gave it 3 days, is that ok with you Hiromitsu? Everyone can vote once, and only once, no changing your mind! Results will be revealed AFTER the 3 days are up.

[The Blue Ronin]

Doesn't a haiku have to have a reference to a season in it?

[Bayushi Hiromitsu]

Thanks Senshi-samaaaaa!! that was great!!!

[Asahina Yukihime]

Nor 2, nor 4... 3... count 3 and on the 3.... (I'm out of myself today)

[Togashi Homsar]

Oct 3, 2011 21:17:11 GMT -5 Bayushi Senshi said:

I gave it 3 days, is that ok with you Hiromitsu? Everyone can vote once, and only once, no changing your mind! Results will be revealed AFTER the 3 days are up.[/quote

Aww, but what about the Chicago way?

[Hiruma Koji]

Defending Empire,
no time for witty poets;
Attacking Spider.

~Hiruma Koji

[Shosuro Aroru]

...I believe #3 is the only one that actually follows a 5-7-5 syllable lay out. #1 5-7-6, #2 5-6-5, #4 6-7-6, #5 3-7-3, and #6 5-8-5. Assuming you loosen it up to short first line, long middle, same length as first third line you still lose #1.

[Kakita Mitsouko]

Rules for Haiku in English are slighty different. Often they use just 14 syllabes. Or at least it's what I read in this book, a guide to haiku www.chipublib.org/search/details/cn/2047447/results/1/ It was to be written in Japanese instead?
To be strict no one is written in the right method, considering either Japanese or English style of haikai.

[Kakita Sojiro]

Those Kakita boys
Jump from perfectly good walls
To go chasing rams.

Nevermind the Lions,
All forty thousand of them.
Are they all insane?

Momma Kakita
Is going to kick their butts
When she meets with them.

[kentaro]

Oct 5, 2011 0:11:50 GMT -5 Shosuro Aroru said:

...I believe #3 is the only one that actually follows a 5-7-5 syllable lay out. #1 5-7-6, #2 5-6-5, #4 6-7-6, #5 3-7-3, and #6 5-8-5. Assuming you loosen it up to short first line, long middle, same length as first third line you still lose #1.

Oops.

[Bayushi Senshi]

I was always taught that, even in English, a haiku had to have a 5-7-5 syllabic count.

[Shosuro Yoichi]

For our honorable allies, the Crane, under assault from the Crab

Rising from salt spray,
The swift diving waterbird
Cracks shells on the beach

[Tamori Manji]

Oct 5, 2011 9:56:12 GMT -5 Bayushi Senshi said:

I was always taught that, even in English, a haiku had to have a 5-7-5 syllabic count.

Jiyuritsu(自由律) stands unrestrained by the 5-7-5 rule. And this rule really makes sense only in japanese, since each kanji is a complete idea (with only a few hiragana and katakana being used to complete and tie the words).

There are many "rules" in english, like the use of a cut point (usually a punctuation mark) that compares two ideas/images; the use of a season word; or the use of a total of three lines with up to 17 syllables distributed among them.

I am by no means any authority on the subject but I'll use some quick examples from the wikipedia (mainly just to piss people who dislike wikipedia off, but also because I'm lazy) to better illustrate the point:

Snow in my shoe
Abandoned
Sparrow's nest

Jack Kerouac (collected in Book of Haikus, Penguin Books, 2003)

Whitecaps on the bay:
A broken signboard banging
In the April wind.

Richard Wright (collected in Haiku: This Other World, Arcade Publishing, 1998)

downpour:
my "I-Thou"
T-shirt

Raymond Roseliep (Rabbit in the Moon, Alembic Press, 1983)

Just friends:
he watches my gauze dress
blowing on the line.

Alexis Rotella (After an Affair, Merging Media, 1984)

Little spider,
will you outlive
me?

Cor van den Heuvel (Haiku Anthology, 34d ed. 1999)

This is to say that people just do whatever they like, at least in english, then create rules for it later. There are even variant forms with less or more than three lines. So, since this is a friendly tournament, I think we should worry more about the idea itself than the form it takes. The intention here is to be, in my opinion, pleasing, short and catchy.

Just my 2 koku about the subject.